Tutor report and response to Tutor feedback Assignment 5

Tutor report Assignment 5

Response to Tutor feedback Assignment 5

"The breadth and depth of your research is driving the coursework and assignment work forward and leading to some very interesting developments." (Bloomfield, 2015)

Reading back over comments made from a previous assessment, one of the pointers was developing research. I have really tried to link theory to practice over this course and I think it is paying off.

 Points for development

• "introduction to the Photobook at the top of the page"
• "cut the assignment briefs" - too much writing on the page
• "important to include your reference points in your prep, as you have done, but keep some distance to Gregory’s series in the work itself and in your artist statement, as this should be your own voice."
• "permission for soundtrack"  have contacted the performer, but no response as yet
• "artist’s statement a little confusing. It should be a finished statement of intent, so don’t include ‘hopefully confirm’ for instance. It could probably be a bit shorter, and kept tightly focused on your work."
• Include research in the reading list tab e.g. Foucault’s heterotopic space

Previous idea for assignment

"Ghosts within the landscape looks really interesting, I especially like the two woman walking into shot. Some of the others are a little close perhaps, do you intend that intimacy?  Subject gaze to camera fundamentally affects the way an image is read – is that really what you want? You have to be rigorous with your visual language because you’re engaging with complex levels of representation here, that’s why I’m nit picking!"

Great to have feedback on an idea I originally pursued before developing it into the final version. I take my tutor's point about the gaze. I had thought the images needed more space around them. The gaze is something to be aware of in the future.

Further research

Liz Wells - gaze

Gillian Rose covers the Lacanian gaze, the male gaze and the tourist gaze in her Visual Methodologies. 

I had not come across Rose's book before but found a copy on the internet, along with John Berger's ways of seeing. Having read these, I was able to link assignments together in more detail through the tourist gaze.