Tutor report and response to tutor feedback assignment 4

Assignment 4 Tutor Report

Response to Tutor Feedback Assignment 4
"A well-chosen subject Nicola, which supports your recent assignment work. It does need a thorough read through for referencing and punctuation before assessment." (Bloomfield, 2015)

I was pleased with this comment. I was inspired by Assignment 3's further reading and came across a current article which fitted in well with it, which also developed my interest around memory. At times it felt I was studying sociology rather than photography and so having 2 artists to link the work back to kept me on track. I was keen to include Deller's work as I had previously been to All that is solid melts into air which I could relate to and I am old enough to remember the miner's strikes which happened not far from my location.
 

Points for development

Extend title - expand on quote by David Campany by linking it to re-enactment photography and collective memory to give more information 

"Harvard referencing - for direct quotes the author and page number should be cited within the text rather than the publisher or title.   Try printing on paper and in a different font for a final proofread before submitting."

"cite your sources when making statements of fact"

"lead with a question"

"be rigorous in your reasoning" 

I agree with the above comments and will re-write these points when revisiting this assignment.

"Titles and dates are needed for Dellers work and Mike Figgis’ film".  ( I thought I had included them. I have tried to make this clearer)

"If your bibliography is the same as your references, just include the references. If you've read much more widely around your subject than your references suggest, then a bibliography can be useful to include."

I think this is one of the areas where tutors have individual preferences. For a previous tutor, I had to include all the references in the bibliography. I have removed them. It is cost effective when printing! 

Further reading

I pulled of the OCA referencing guide, the UCA referencing guide, was given a copy of the referencing guide for Lincoln University and downloaded the audio visual citation guide. I hope these will stand me in good stead.

Walter Benjamin's Illuminations - contains a short extract on the Angel of History. having read this book towards the end of the course, I can associate with some of his ideas and see why he is used to illustrate some ideas. The edition I bought had a biography at the beginning so I now understands where he fits along with Debord and flaneurs.